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Tuesday, 5 May 2009

An Angel was I......


An angel was I
To he I called dad
and to she I called mom
Preserved was I
as a pearl
Protected was I
in the shell.


The day came
day of rings
day of kisses


I was his
In my new abode
Day never came
Darkness was all over

The physical me was
nothing but cuts and scars

Hanging was I
on a string
hope ...
he whose was I

Fell deep down
never to come back
Betrayed was I..

A woman can suffer anything...but only until her love is with her. But when she is betrayed of it......she has nothing left.

Well today's woman is no more like that..that's a debate......but emotionally that's what I feel.



62 comments:

Kido said...
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Kido said...

Profound!

I can totally relate with the 1st para :)

B/w I've updated the subscription link... Should work now :)

Arv said...

emotional conflicts can never be ignored :(

Hemanth Potluri said...

woweeeeeeee....:D....its was a very good post...and yes ur angel to everyone priya :)...it was good post on to debate on todays women :)...i should say u worked it marvelous :)..

urs..hemu..

Hemanth Potluri said...

@arv

yup bro i totally agree u with this one :)...

urs..hemu..

Hemanth Potluri said...

priya now i want u to write a poem on love :)...well u know i am not specialized in it but i remember the arguments we have all the time :P..

urs..hemu..

Hemanth Potluri said...

well just one more comment to say HUGS....

urs..hemu..

Hemanth Potluri said...

i already told u let me say again :P...i loved the background for the template...totally ur type :)..cool :P...

urs..hemu..

Meghna said...

very touching....a very fab read!!


PS- which class now? how r u?? please pay a visit soon :D

Miss ya :)

Harshita said...

Really...Really...Really good...

Nanhi Pari, how did you manage this one?

Bahut badiya... kudos!!

Main teri double pankha ho gayi rey!!

I cud so much relate to this whole post... :)

Dhanya said...

Today's woman is the same too... in a way. But she's a fighter and knows how to come out of it soon enough.

swati said...

todays women is emotionally the same..she has a heart too..bt yes more mature n strong from within..
n that write up was completely awesome...
take care!!

freelancer said...

superlicious

Amal Bose said...

really touching post..
but u shd fight and come out of it as Dhanya has said..


n nice template too..
feels like sitting in a beach..
a really cooling effect.. :)

Sam said...

DJ in full form like Veeru Sehwag :)

Suresh Kumar said...

Sad kar diya mera ko, tere Poem Na....

But a nice poem. Isko 10/10 milega..

Reminds me of another budding and young poet who is missing from blog world these days.

Puneet Sahalot said...

hmmm.... samj nahi aa raha ki kya likhu...
actually.... m speechles... :)

toooo gooood...
keep it up..!!! thats it.. ;)


n 1 more thing... try using ieplorer/firefox/opera for browsing my blog...

joiedevivre said...

very nice attempt...you can really write good worth reading poems..

kya aage aur poems padne ko milengi??

deluded said...

actually,

all decent humans are that way.

just goes to show,

what we're becoming slowly

yamini meduri said...

it was nice PJ.....Welcome back.....perfect come back...!!!

deeps said...

That’s a perfect symphony written in blue!!
I hope things are on the purple patch once again …

Some of these lines touchy and emotional as they are give me another meaning though ..

It is a heart that bubbles with emotions that pour out in poems ha?

Keshi said...

Brilliant Joyce! I liked it.

But today's woman is no different...the basic instincts of a woman is still intact. Just that the times hv changed. But 'she' isnt dead. Only it seems like it.

Im glad ur back to writing :) HUGS!

Keshi.

Mel Avila Alarilla said...

My child you will experience so many betrayals in life. Just hold on to God and trust Him with all your heart because He will never leave you nor forsake you. Learn to see life as a learning station where we live in order to please God and give glory to His name. You are such an excellent poetess. Thanks for the post. God bless you always.

Priya Joyce said...

@ kido:

heyy thanx..re

well yeh every daughter is an angel to her parents.


yepps will check it..

Priya Joyce said...

@ arv:
yeah...and never shud be ignored also.

Priya Joyce said...

@ hemz:

thank uu thanx a lot re...

it was an honest outcome of a trend of feelings goin thru ma mind these dys :)

Priya Joyce said...

@ hemz:

yeehe sure..one day wen I am head over heels in love wth someone i'd write it :P:P

Priya Joyce said...

@ hemz:

hehehe u r gone mad....and mekin me mad too :P:P

lol thnx a lot for the hug as well as the template compliment :)

Priya Joyce said...

@ meghna:

thanx a lot....

well hav completed the first yr..

am fyn..

and yeah ma'am hav visited u :P:P

Priya Joyce said...

@ harshiii:

heyyy u just made ma day....tthanx a lot for the compliment...

bas mann mei jo tha likh daala :)

:):)
:P

Priya Joyce said...

@ dhanya:

yesh true......that's y I said its a debated topic.coz some don't agree to wat we believe :)

Priya Joyce said...

@ swati:

true...strong but soft too....

and thanx a lot :)*hugs*

:):)

Priya Joyce said...

@ freelancer:

heyy thanxx...

:P

Priya Joyce said...

@ amal:

thankiyuu.thnx a lot.

btw its not abt me...:P

and thanx...actually its not ma choice..:)

Priya Joyce said...

@ sam:

yeah surely :)

Priya Joyce said...

@ suresh:

i too was sad after penning it dwn..

well thnx a lottt :)

heyy talking of AAYUSHI??

Priya Joyce said...

@ puneet:

hey thanx a lot re
:)

and yeh wen the probs wth firefox get fixed i'll use tat coz i hate CHROME :(

Priya Joyce said...

@ joie:

thanx re..:)

hows exams goin on gal??

yeh sure..u'll read many :P

Priya Joyce said...

@ deluded:

hey welcome here..

well yeah..may be....still not all..

Priya Joyce said...

@ yamini:

heyy thank uu dear.

yahaa
:)

Priya Joyce said...

@ deeps:

well yeah....i was emo..while riting this..but that was basically feeling bad for such women.

so I can say a yes there

and thanxx

:)

Priya Joyce said...

@ keshi:

heyy thanx dear...well yeah.today's woman is no different...and also that she can fight it out.....

but still this is not completely acceptable....some are more on the emotional side than the strong one....

than's y i said debated :)

well yehs thanx a lot re
:)

Priya Joyce said...

@ MEl:

yeah that's one person we all can completely trust...

and wud never betray us..

thanx a lot for the lovely words :)

:)

Quest said...

Well, can I next expect a sequel to this?
A well crafted story about revenge, mystery, horror, good ghosts, bad ghosts, chudaiyal like in the film 'makdee', car chases, plane chases, run chases, dishum dishum and so on..... :) ;)

Quest said...

Priya Joyce said...

@ quest:

well nopes...is nothing like wat u made it :P

it was a sad recitation.of a woman betrayed by her lover....

Quest said...

See a blank comment above.... (the comment was wobbled up into a black hole) :D

Chronicwriter said...

hey PJ!

u write like this/

?

chriz

Chronicwriter said...

hey PJ!

u write like this/

?

chriz

Diana. said...

Times must have changed but today's woman does get hurt if betrayed...But she even knows hw to get out it.

Kartz said...

Take a bow, Priya.

Good to see you write like this.

Keep writing. Spread the voice.

Peace.

Sins Very Kool said...

Hi PJ :)

So sorry for not comin often... but really good post... Very touchin lines :)

Keep d poet in u awake for long :)

:)

Priya Joyce said...

@ quest:

well yeah..how did u manage it?

Priya Joyce said...

@ Chriz:

write like what??

Priya Joyce said...

@ Diana:

yepps true....emo but strong :)

Priya Joyce said...

@ Kartz:

thanx.re

yeah..hav ta :)

Priya Joyce said...

@sinduja:

heheh not a prob re. well r ya bakk to blogs??

lemme chk....:P

Mayz said...

good mature post...me likes :)

Priya Joyce said...

@ Mayz:

:)
thnx :)

Vani said...

Dats a really superb poem PJ. Luvd it.:)

I think todays women are not so different. Though they've grown up so much in other things...emotionally dey women r same I think.
When they fall in love they really mean it. Dey giv everything in luv..so they cannot bear a betrayal.
Only difference I see in modern women is dat dey dont fall in love that easily. Dey choose their men so carefully. But even so...when dey loose deir luv, its the typical women all over. Some so called 'stronger- women dont show their emotions..dey juz carry on vit their lives..but still..

Priya Joyce said...

@ vani:

yeha....true.emotionally all are the same ....:)

and thanx dear :)

Preetilata【ツ】 said...

it was indeed a very touching post.

loved ur poem. :)